This discussion over at
queenoftheskies had me fuming. And I left comments. But I wanted to see what Nathan Bransford really had to say. And I found a number of posts on the topic of series vs standalones.
He has some good advice re: submitting the first book in a series:
Which seems reasonable. Then he ruins it with this:
Before he explains, though, he says:
When he extolls the virtues of starting fresh with: "Who says you can't create another world that's better than the first?" he has no idea it took me 2 years to rework a universe that it took my former collaborator and I 6 years before that to create and populate. And I had to create new characters for the WIR, which I did over the next 2 years I put into the writing and first full revision. I've already put somewhere around a decade into this project and I don't want to take even half that time on a new one. I have an aborted effort (another 2 years, though concurrent with the WIR) of trying to create something fresh, already. I want to get on with writing something new and that's the sequel.
Am I hurting my odds? Maybe. But I'd hurt my odds more with poor plotting and writing.
And yet, I would have left this alone, if not for this section:
Professional writers as with pro anybodies, get paid and make a living from their writing, or whatever other thing they do (photography, art, music, writing software, designing websites, agenting). However they achieve that success likely varies from person to person. I may never be a pro writer, but I've already deleted 80 single spaced 10pt prose twice before finishing the first draft of the WIR. That doesn't make me a pro. Was I ruthless? No. I was frustrated. Those pages weren't working. I couldn't finish unless I tossed them. I call it sanity maintenance. It was frighteningly easy to toss drek. And y'know, it was fun, because it meant I was trying to solve a puzzle and that's the fun part of this for me: figuring out the story by writing it.
I don't like the implication that you can't get better if you don't create a new world. As with any skill, if you keep working at it, especially if you can develop a critical eye and learn from what doesn't work, you are very likely to improve. And he was missing a comma or two in that quoted section.
When he talks about his version of "for fun" writers, he insults would-be pros and fun writers (I think of them as hobbyists) alike. People who write for fun often write fanfic. They'll write to share stories or stick 'em in a drawer. They'll write in one universe or many. Fanfic writers do both all the time. I know. I used to be one.
One of my fanfic friends is a terrific writer. She often writes novella length fan stories, so I once asked her why she never attempted an original novel. She told me she didn't want to be a pro writer. She just wrote for the fun of it. And she's written in a dozen fandoms, and has never created a universe from scratch.
Finally, we get the caveat that should have come upfront, albeit in a shortened form:
Same as it makes little sense to write according to trends (which don't tell you what's in the works, only what was bought by editors a year or two earlier), unless you want to write those kinds of books, ie write vampire stories because you like them, not just because they're hot right now.
Because he's a literary agent, his advice will be taken more seriously than uh, mine, because I'm just a former fanfic writer who hasn't even submitted her novel anywhere yet. But that doesn't mean his advice is gospel. As with any writing advice, take what you can use and leave the rest. And I think his advice would have been easier to swallow if he hadn't been so careless with his wording and so cavalier about "fun" writers, which is his term, not mine, and not a usage I've ever seen before. He would've been better to simply discuss the things that might impede the chance of getting your first novel published than to make it an issue re: what you should write. If that's not what he said or meant, it sure is how it seemed to me.
I would've posted this on my Blogger writing blog, but I think I've pretty much given up on that. So, I'm keeping it public here.
He has some good advice re: submitting the first book in a series:
"...when you want to write a book that you intend to be the first in a series (short version: you only kinda sorta mention that it could maybe possibly be turned into a sequel)."
Which seems reasonable. Then he ruins it with this:
"But I haven't actually blogged about whether an unpublished author should set out to write a series in the first place. My opinion? You shouldn't."And while it's just one agent's advice and a young agent at that, it still has that dreaded "should" word, in this case "shouldn't." And then he says this:
"But here's the thing: getting a first novel published is really, really difficult. And getting a second novel published can be even more difficult. You shouldn't be saving your best ideas for the third, fifth, or seventh book in an unpublished series: when you're starting out you should go for broke with that one novel, throwing in everything including the kitchen sink, and making that one novel as stellar as possible. Sure, leave a few threads dangling if you want, leave open the possibility of revisiting the characters and the world, but the novel should be completely self-contained and satisfying on its own. "And this is where I think he really shows a carelessness in his own writing. He's assuming the later books will be more creative than the first. He's assuming that the first novel can't stand on its own. He's assuming a lot of things he doesn't explain upfront and therefore, he muddies his thesis. Because later in the post, he says:
"Now, I do want to make a distinction here between series with a serial plot where one book depends upon the other and series that are set in the same world with the same characters but feature a stand-alone plot."Uh, shouldn't that distinction have been made upfront, so people would know what you were talking about, before they got all worked up or confused? And yet, I still don't know what the heck he's referring to. Because my WIR can stand on its own. The sequel however, picks up 5 years later and is dependent on the events of the first book. I think I can write it so it would stand on its own and if it got published and not the first, I could use the first for a lot of backstory. But book 2's plot is inspired by book 1. It grows out of it. Book 1 ends with a certain state of the universe. Book 2 disrupts that now status quo violently in the first paragraph. So, not really a serial plot, but definitely a direct sequel. And I'd bet we could come up with many other permutations of this. But to start off talking about series when you mean a specific kind of series is misleading, IMO. And there's a big difference in discussing one story broken up into a trilogy and a series of stories that are either standalones set in the same universe (with or not with the same characters) and a series of connected stories or sequels.
Before he explains, though, he says:
"But if you go for broke and can't find a taker for that first novel: Start a new one. Do not write a sequel. Unless it's just for fun. Agents are not going to spring for the sequel to an unpublished novel."While I can see this being good advice, I bristle at the "for fun" comment and that's what got many of us annoyed. Because if you have nothing else to write that gets your juices flowing, write the f'in sequel if that's in your heart. If it, too, can stand on its own while still being connected to the first, what is the problem? If it sells, maybe they'll be interested in the prequel. If nothing else, you'll be working on your writing skills. You might find you can work in enough of the first book into the second and make it one outstanding book. While being flexible and not wed to your words is usually a sound MO, it's not the only one worth pursuing.
When he extolls the virtues of starting fresh with: "Who says you can't create another world that's better than the first?" he has no idea it took me 2 years to rework a universe that it took my former collaborator and I 6 years before that to create and populate. And I had to create new characters for the WIR, which I did over the next 2 years I put into the writing and first full revision. I've already put somewhere around a decade into this project and I don't want to take even half that time on a new one. I have an aborted effort (another 2 years, though concurrent with the WIR) of trying to create something fresh, already. I want to get on with writing something new and that's the sequel.
Am I hurting my odds? Maybe. But I'd hurt my odds more with poor plotting and writing.
And yet, I would have left this alone, if not for this section:
"Professional writers are RUTHLESS with their own worlds and work. They will walk away from something or delete 150 pages faster than you can say Justin Bobby, and half the time they won't even really sweat it (the other half of the time they'll start the drinking and wonder why in the world anyone thinks writing is fun). Professional writers press the delete button because know they can do better. For-fun writers linger and linger in the same world or with the same characters and can't bear to start a new world or delete anything. And unless you press that delete button or start fresh or create a new world it's impossible to get better. "*sigh*
Professional writers as with pro anybodies, get paid and make a living from their writing, or whatever other thing they do (photography, art, music, writing software, designing websites, agenting). However they achieve that success likely varies from person to person. I may never be a pro writer, but I've already deleted 80 single spaced 10pt prose twice before finishing the first draft of the WIR. That doesn't make me a pro. Was I ruthless? No. I was frustrated. Those pages weren't working. I couldn't finish unless I tossed them. I call it sanity maintenance. It was frighteningly easy to toss drek. And y'know, it was fun, because it meant I was trying to solve a puzzle and that's the fun part of this for me: figuring out the story by writing it.
I don't like the implication that you can't get better if you don't create a new world. As with any skill, if you keep working at it, especially if you can develop a critical eye and learn from what doesn't work, you are very likely to improve. And he was missing a comma or two in that quoted section.
When he talks about his version of "for fun" writers, he insults would-be pros and fun writers (I think of them as hobbyists) alike. People who write for fun often write fanfic. They'll write to share stories or stick 'em in a drawer. They'll write in one universe or many. Fanfic writers do both all the time. I know. I used to be one.
One of my fanfic friends is a terrific writer. She often writes novella length fan stories, so I once asked her why she never attempted an original novel. She told me she didn't want to be a pro writer. She just wrote for the fun of it. And she's written in a dozen fandoms, and has never created a universe from scratch.
"So if you don't sell a novel? Move on. Write something new and something better."And how much time, do you suppose, he thinks should be devoted to this? A year? Ten? Something in between? Better would be to start something new, anything (sequel or completely different), as soon as the first is sent on its way to the first agent and/or editor on your list. And given how many people seem to break in with books that are followed by sequels or other books in that universe (mystery, fantasy, and SF are big genres for this), I have to wonder if they tried something different after book 1, or waited til they had a few under their belt, like, y'know, Dennis Lehane, who didn't have a standalone, Mystic River, til he had a few books in his Patrick and Angie series in print. I don't know what books he wrote first or in what order, but I believe he didn't write Mystic River until he had some of the others done. I doubt he could have written the superior Mystic River without having written some of his series first.
Finally, we get the caveat that should have come upfront, albeit in a shortened form:
"But whenever I'm offering general advice, it's all about odds -- your best odds are with a self-contained first novel, and when you're facing long odds to begin with, I think it's smart to avoid anything that makes you even more of an underdog."Yes, it's about the odds. Of getting published. None of this advice has much to do with writing the best book(s) you can. I think you improve your odds of doing that by writing in a universe you believe in, with characters you can be excited about. I think you improve your odds by writing better than everyone else in the slush pile with you. I think you improve your odds if you can come up with something new or something with a new spin on an old idea. And by writing a publishable book, you improve your odds of getting published.
Same as it makes little sense to write according to trends (which don't tell you what's in the works, only what was bought by editors a year or two earlier), unless you want to write those kinds of books, ie write vampire stories because you like them, not just because they're hot right now.
Because he's a literary agent, his advice will be taken more seriously than uh, mine, because I'm just a former fanfic writer who hasn't even submitted her novel anywhere yet. But that doesn't mean his advice is gospel. As with any writing advice, take what you can use and leave the rest. And I think his advice would have been easier to swallow if he hadn't been so careless with his wording and so cavalier about "fun" writers, which is his term, not mine, and not a usage I've ever seen before. He would've been better to simply discuss the things that might impede the chance of getting your first novel published than to make it an issue re: what you should write. If that's not what he said or meant, it sure is how it seemed to me.
I would've posted this on my Blogger writing blog, but I think I've pretty much given up on that. So, I'm keeping it public here.
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That post he made and the responses I saw from my flist pissed me off beyond belief...
Just look at my contribution at
And I am quite guilty of misreading and jumping to conclusions. :P
I do see writers planning out 3, 4 or 5 book series, and more than one writer has said, "Well, book 1 just introduces the characters, but in book 3 it really gets interesting!" Er, yeah.
I planned on a stand-alone first novel and pitched it with "it leaves open the possibility of a sequel." They bought 1 and said, go ahead, write book 2. I kind of freaked because I had no idea what happened next. Now we're on book 3.
I know there are writers who don't work out a full story for their first book. When George Lucas constructed Star Wars, he might've had the trilogy in mind, but he knew the first movie had to have an ending and succeed before he'd get to do 2, and 3 which was a direct sequel of the 2nd which ended on a cliffhanger the way the serials he loved ended each chapter.
If the post from Bransford had dealt with that issue, of not properly plotting a first book in a series to stand on its own, and if he hadn't made those silly remarks about fun writers vs pros, he would've had a useful post. Instead, he just alienated a lot of people, many of whom could use that advice. IMO, someone dealing with writers and writing should write better.
I couldn't write that story that would have probably been more marketable than what I've got now because it's a hot topic. I tried it only on the advice of some people who thought I could write from a theme. Wrong. And I tried it only because I wanted to work on something different while waiting for my collaborator's health to improve. But instead, I ended up back in our shared universe, reworking it to make it my own. That's where I'm comfortable writing now. So, I learned for me, it was better to go back to a series of interconnected novels, which is a realm I spent a decade working on, populated with characters I like, which is what your advice would say I shouldn't be doing. And yes, the first novel can standalone, only because I personally don't like continued stories in novels, though I don't mind novels that leave things open to interpretation as to what comes next. I just don't like waiting years to find out what happens after.
I don't fit this perfectly because I was writing with a collaborator, in a universe largely created by her but one which I contributed to. And after nearly 8 years, that novel is dead and I ended up starting over, in that universe. I would think that sort of situation doesn't come up a lot. And I hadn't mentioned it in this thread before because it muddies the water and isn't really relevant to my point.
It hits people's buttons because you are polarizing quite strongly. You contrast 'professional' with 'for-fun' writing, which takes little notice of the many shades of grey in the field - people who approach writing professionally, but are not published yet; people who produce professional quality work but have no interest in publication, and somewhere else in the field (because it's not a stricly linear progression) the people who write a little when the mood takes them. Inbetween are dotted a lot more; and most people who are serious about their writing tend to be annoyed at being called 'for-fun writers' just because they do not conform to one man's idea of what 'professional' means.
Professional writers are RUTHLESS with their own worlds and work
Sure. But the good ones are also passionate about what they write, and they'll find ways of making it work, or at the very least analyze the heck out of it to find why it doesn't work, where did they go wrong, so that they make the mistake only once.
Professional writers press the delete button because know they can do better.
This, again, is a sentence designed to raise writer's hackles. It's prescriptive and it's denigrating to anyone who _doesn't_ work in the fashion you consider to be the hallmark of the professional. Of course writers delete large chunks of text or shelve whole novels-in-draft at the beginning of their careers, and that's a good thing; but fast forward into the territory where a writer sells on an outline and to a deadline, and he cannot afford to need to write 60K of text only to find out that it doesn't work, rip up and start again, or if he does, he'll be in deep trouble. My bet is that the professionals I know will find out much sooner that they're doing something wrong, and will find ways of turning around the non-working bits into bits that work.
If you had said something like 'professionals don't believe every word is golden, they are ruthless about their prose and will take out whole scenes and characters if they don't add to the book' you would have been on much safer ground, and less offensive.
Note that I'm not disagreeing with your advice, just pointing out that the delivery of it was worded problematically.
Looking at the sales reported in Locus (which I know are not complete, but indicative of the field) there seem to be a fair amount of first trilogies being sold, and for a new writer, if you *are* working on a trilogy, completing them before selling the first seems like a *very* good strategy, because the learning curve is just so steep, and the danger of ending up with bits in book one you would like o change but can't, so write them while you still can.
But I will say this: I think some people want to believe that they can write whatever they want on a lark to write and then get published and become a bestseller. That just isn't the way it works, in my experience -- it very usually takes an approach where you are ruthless with your writing, you revise revise revise (which means pressing the delete button) and keeping an eye toward what works in the marketplace. It's not haphazard I'm sure it's happened somewhere in the publishing world (and great for them too!), but in my experience there's a difference between the people who approach writing like a business and those who write on a lark. If you don't want to be a bestseller and selling copies is not your goal and your idea of success, don't worry about it! That's fine too.
I'm sorry if I'm bursting some bubbles, but there's also plenty of room in my caveat paragraph for all the people who do things differently (and many of those people have gone on to great success). If you are one of those people I wish you all the best and I seriously couldn't be happier for you. I'm just trying to help the people whose goal is to be published, and I don't think it's worth taking my advice so personally.
And yes, someone might be writing for pro publication, but does the writing when the mood strikes them. I don't see myself making a living at writing, but I sure would like to be able to get a novel published whenever I manage to finish it and I write when the mood strikes.
The advice I got years ago that "set me free" was to not write with an eye toward the marketplace. That's what I should look at after I've written the thing. Today's marketplace is what sold to publishers 1-3 years ago. The marketplace when I'm ready to submit my polished ms will be different again from today's. It's starting to feel like now you're mixing apples and oranges. And the advice I've gotten that tells me everyone has his or her own way of writing comes from a pro with 25 year or more of making her living solely from her writing and who counts dozens of pro writers among her friends.
Just as writing an outline can kill a book idea for me, so does even thinking about the marketplace or how I'll sell it. First thing is to get it finished and prove I can do at least that. Then I'll worry about the rest. Without the advice to stop worrying about things impeding my writing, I never would have a second draft. Finally.
And you're not bursting bubbles. If you have been reading carefully, many of us when we finally teased out your thesis, agree. What you have been is disingenuous, and yes, insulting, even if I personally wasn't offended. Ten years ago, I would've been. And given how fragile the ego of many a new and aspiring and even some pro writers can be, you were more discouraging than you probably intended, because your post was so off-putting and confusing.
(One agent had a horror story to tell: two novels with interchangable chapters. Both were competently written, but just that little predictable. It was sheer coincidence they more or less arrived together.)
I've got one idea which I am turning into a graphic novel in my spare time - read when I've finished working and I'm not writing - because I felt it was too weak to turn it into a novel - too restricted in its cast, too episodical. For a fun project, that's fine, but my writing time is too valuable.
I have no idea whether my WIP is commercially viable - I guess I'll find out when I send it out - but I have no illusions that it will be a bestseller. A strong female character who singlehandedly sets out to destroy the hold of 'the ton' (or equivalent) in a city of mages, with faint regency vibes (including a dash of violence) - it certainly isn't 'written to the market' but whether the market will like it or not will have to be seen.
<shrug>
I can make it strong. I can make it good. Anything else depends on other people - agents, editors, bookbuyers, the public at large. Worrying about them when I haven't finished the manuscript seems extremely premature.
I also don't think I'll be a best selling author. I'll be thrilled to earn out any advance. I'll be thrilled if anyone buys the thing should it get published. I plan to buy and donate a copy to every branch library in my library system. That's about 90 so far. ;)
Let's face it. The percentage of all writers who are best sellers is small. And when you write SF, it gets smaller still.
Who knows how long it will take for my ms to make the rounds and what the marketplace will look like by then. And I have no way of knowing that even if my book is not overdone now that a dozen people won't be sending out something similar the same time I am.
And honestly, I don't read that much each year and most books in recent years that I've read haven't been SF. After reading SF almost exclusively for 20 years, I've spent the last decade catching up with suspense, literary fic, and some other things. I don't know that I would recognize if my plot has been done to death already. But I can't worry about it. It's the story I had to tell. I don't know what I would've written if not that. I don't know what else to write now if not the sequel. I'm one of those people who isn't overflowing with ideas. I do have a lot of characters, tho.
But once I've got that, I can poke the idea gently to see what kind of story it is.
I don't get that many ideas, but since I'm a natural trilogist, they tend to last a fair while ;-)
I do like how this post has generated comments and an interesting discussion.
But I really disagree that my post was insulting -- I mean, look what I said compared to what has been said about me in this thread!
People were insulted/offended. You can't deny their feelings. Intention doesn't ameliorate that.
This has been a point of contention in the comics industry re: the use of female and minority characters recently. A writer/editor/artist says something that offended people, then denied they were offended because he didn't mean to offend them, which just made it worse. Things got kinda ugly in the comics blogosphere this summer over a few such instances, including the ridiculous Mary Jane washes Spidey's costume statue. When people are offended by our words, it is better, IMO, to look at our words and apologize than to deny the offense.
And I haven't said a thing about you, whom I don't know. I was discussing your post. I think it's poorly worded, insulting in sections, and obscures your very good point. That opinion won't change because you didn't mean it that way.
No. *those* are the people who might be called 'for-fun writers' - but there's a whole lot more out there who are taking their craft seriously. Being serious - and aspiring to be professional - does not mean you're not having fun, but labelling people as non-professional when they see themselves as such, or are aspiring to become professional will not win you friends. You asked what people found offensive - this is one of those things.
What's wrong with being called a for-fun writer?
Nothing when it's true. But when you're working your socks off trying to hone your craft it sounds like an insult. The world, thankfully, does not consist of professionals and people who dabble in writing. There's a large middle ground.
I'm just making a distinction between people whose main goal in writing is eventual publication and making a career as a writer, and those who have other reasons for writing.
'Not writing trilogies' seems a poor marker of distinction between the two groups. As is 'willingness to delete large chunks of work.'
How can you expect me to cover every single eventuality in publishing and still offer anything resembling advice?
It's not the advice as such - it's sound advice, and I think it's important for writers who want to be published to consider the business side of writing, but your advice will be less controversial and easier to understand if it is less prescriptive. When you talk about what writers should do, and about the rules of publishing you'll raise a storm of objections. You'll also play in the hands of all those writers who believe that there is a secret cabal in publishing and that if a new writer can find all those rules and follow them, they will be published. You really *really* don't want people who follow your advice 'because this is what the agent said.' Write that queries on pink paper are ok, and you will get stacks of them. Lay down any other rules of the business, and the same will happen, only it won't be as obvious.
But I will say this: I think some people want to believe that they can write whatever they want on a lark to write and then get published and become a bestseller.
I don't think anybody who is serious about writing expects to have a bestseller; but consider the extreme alternative: the people who 'write what sells' and look at the shelves today and set out to write a book just like that. That's not how it works either; and I think of the two strategies - write a book you love and make it bloody damn good, and write what you think the market wants based on what editors bought three years ago - the first will prove more successful.
That doesn't mean it sells, but at least if you have something well-done and original you are more likely to attract attention than with something imitating other people's work which you only wrote because you thought it would sell.
I'm sorry if I'm bursting some bubbles
I don't think you are.
I've been someone who in the past (20 plus years ago) gave up trying to write for a pro market because I couldn't see how to follow the "advice" of "experts." And it wasn't until I got to AOL's writers boards in 1996 where pro writers like Patricia Wrede explained that advice isn't rules and there aren't rules. Newbies tend to take things like that as gospel and the advice givers rarely seem to understand how harmful their "advice," especially when loaded with "shoulds" and "shouldn'ts" can be. I feel I was set back 10 years in my quest to have a pro novel published.
I got the point you were saying, really. I also got that you managed to hide it in a post with a lot of irrelevant and even insulting remarks. It was the tone of the post and the order in which you presented things. If you've read and digested my post, and the comments here and on the post I referenced, you'll see that your view of "professional" doesn't jibe with the reality, that being the reality of getting paid and making a living. Period.
Your presentation needs work. When I write things I think say what I mean and beta readers, even if only one of 5, tells me it means something else, I don't argue the point (well, not anymore, but that's something I had to learn not to do). I might explain to them what I meant in the hopes they could offer suggestions on how to fix it. But mostly, I look at my words to see if I can improve clarity. Maybe the beta reader just didn't get it. That happens. But if the majority don't get it, then, maybe it really is me and my wording.
You really don't get it, do you? I didn't give up. I'm back at it, having lost 10 years of trying to improve because wrongheaded advice, different than yours in content but similar in tone, discouraged me. And I resent it. I've finally given up the bitterness, because at 54, I know life is too short, but oh, if only I'd managed to reach the place I am now with my novel even 6 years ago. Maybe it would have been published by now and I'd be further along on this writing gig. Maybe I'd be making enough money so I could retire early.
This is what I said:
"I've been someone who in the past (20 plus years ago) gave up trying to write for a pro market because I couldn't see how to follow the "advice" of "experts." And it wasn't until I got to AOL's writers boards in 1996 where pro writers like Patricia Wrede explained that advice isn't rules and there aren't rules. Newbies tend to take things like that as gospel and the advice givers rarely seem to understand how harmful their "advice," especially when loaded with "shoulds" and "shouldn'ts" can be. I feel I was set back 10 years in my quest to have a pro novel published."
All you responded to was the first sentence, not the rest that concludes with "I feel I was set back 10 years in my quest to have a pro novel published."
I want this. I wanted it years ago. And 20 years ago, I let people discourage me and I wish I'd been stronger mentally, but I wasn't because people in the field, people who taught writing, people who were published, editors, agents, etc. all know better than lowly little me the wannabe writer, right? Thankfully, at the end of 1995 when I found AOL's writers boards, I learned better, and I started getting encouraged that maybe I could do it after all. People in such positions don't always recognize how newbies can look to them as authorities and take their words more seriously than intended.
I wasn't lecturing. I just tend to state my opinions bluntly. I've been told it's a native New Yorker thing. You came here to comment and I responded. No one twisted your arm to post your comments, so I can assume you were hoping for a dialogue. And now you don't like some of it? Well, that's how many of us felt about your post.
I'm not looking to get along and I don't think that's even an issue here as I don't know you. All I care about here is a discourse. I appreciate that you came here to comment on my post. I could have commented on yours, but I preferred to write my own, because, as you saw, it was rather long.
I am an instinctive writer. Patricia Wrede, while conducting what amounted to an online writing clinic with me over a few weeks on the AOL writers boards about 4 or 5 years ago, concluded that I might lean heavily on the intuitive side for revising, too. What works for me won't work for a lot of other writers. What works for most writers usually doesn't work for me.
And because I've come to understand that, coupled with my experience of being so readily discouraged by people "in the know," I tend to stand up for the newbie writer faced with advice that can seem overwhelming. Your post was very discouraging to one of my LiveJournal friends and that bothered me. But after leaving a few comments on her LJ, I gave you the benefit of the doubt and went to read what you had to say for myself and found, once I teased it apart, sound advice poorly presented. I could see how people could misread your post and get a wrong impression and be discouraged -- which did happen. And I wrote a post here about it, offering ways the post could have been better suited to its thesis, ie put the caveat and your definitions upfront.
And the revise and cut isn't a sign of a pro writer, tho a pro writer, unless they can write it fairly clean from scratch (and yes, there are people, few in number perhaps, who work it all out in their heads or in outline and they need very little revision), should be able to do that. But many of what you call "for fun" writers do it, too. I did when I wrote fanfic, as do my friends who still write fanfic. As does my best friend who has no aspirations to write for a pro market, but who writes spy stories with me (and a third friend who may or may not want to try to be a pro writer one of these days) that we print up and share, for fun, as a hobby. She cuts and revises and worries that she's using the very right words.
So as a definition, that doesn't work for me at all.
One of the faults of how the case is presented is that it's presented in the "don't" method. I would have found it more effective to hear things like: "For considering submitting the second book in your sequel -- after the first's been rejected -- you really have to consider whether or not it's a better story."
For example, I've seen some work where Book I was just a backstory dump -- that probably never needed to be published. Book II was considerably better because the author had already completed all the worldbuilding in the first novel.
I think the surest advice to any author is to understand the many, many shortfall, pitfalls, and pratfalls that await you. Don't be delusional about how good your work is -- take each of these things and ask yourself (honestly) if you're at fault on any of them.
Bottom line, if your book is good enough, none of this advice applies. (Caveat -- an author, especially a beginning one, is rarely the best judge of his/her work.)
But if the Book II has a serial plot that depends on the first, and the first book is not good, Book II is not going to find publication even if it's very good -- who is going to publish the sequel to an unpublishable book?
It's all about a writer being self-aware -- and understanding the business. If he/she wants to put the second book forward, it has to stand on its own merits. Absolutely.
Otherwise, get out the cluegun.
And I'd drop the nonsense of pro vs for fun writer. It just got everyone's back hair up.